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Remember the time when you were dead?
You woke up in a coffin instead of a bed.
Fate has decided fate must be true,
But come on and tell me why must it be you?

I see you behind the mirrored glass,
Straight jacket muzzle mask,.
Kicking and screaming tied to a chair.
Come on and tell me, this just isnít fair.

Its time to go and leave this place,
Lay to rest, and forget that face.
Now its over you can breathe,
We know your safe, and I can leave.
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SamHayler Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2015  Professional Writer
This is absolutely fantastic.
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iamnotacoward Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2015  New Deviant Hobbyist Writer
That is truly a good poem, very well written
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omg...this poem is amazing. I wish I could write like this.
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UnbearableME Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2014
this is an awesome poem :)
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thewiccagirl18 Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014
I really love this poem.
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PutridRaven Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2014  Student General Artist
you should write more, honestly! this one is great!
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princessnolife Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2013
AMAZING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:D
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BrokenNxyGosvintha Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013

amazing poem I write poems myself :)

 

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puglover484 Featured By Owner May 20, 2013
that is freaking awesome
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pixilmaster Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
may i have permission to expand this poem and turn it into a song?
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viralcode666 Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013
dark brandon; i must say thats even better than mine. bravo! bravo!

toon brandon dabs his eyes with a handkerchief "beautiful sob"

mean brandon: even i'm speechless.

diva brandon: it's got a flow to it i approve.
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Redbuick95 Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
nice
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LeadKisses Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow. . . That is dark indeed. . .
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:iconstopabull1:
stopabull1 Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Love it.
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Myth82 Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Yesss... Dark Poetry .... Lovee It
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gothchick913 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
i love this. its amazing
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candygirl101010 Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2012  Student Writer
omg ur a true poet i wish i could rite like that
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chaotic-ktty Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
:3 Wow.
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xDeadlySilence Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012
This is really good, it tells a stroy and has a lot of depth to it. Amazing.
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Alexandra-Lupin Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2012
This is really good!
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Shatteredhearts1 Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2012
AMAZING LOV IT
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kushxkitty Featured By Owner May 31, 2012
I don't get it. Can somebody explain?
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marcusisthebestever Featured By Owner May 18, 2012
Amazing I love it!
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ladyspyogenes Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I really like this poem. It's chilling, yet positive at the end in a way. Great job!
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izzyisawesome99 Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
beuatiful, the only word descirable for this :love:
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wastedtearsofjoy Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Really.REALLY beautyful!!!!!!!! It is just beautiful!!!!!!
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tepig1000 Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2012
AMAZING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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tepig1000 Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2012
RATE:***********************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************
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ladyspyogenes Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Very nice work
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TickerTwizted Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
Very beautiful
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DarkFade7k Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Nice!
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kdawn1810 Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2012
I like this :D
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Duskseeker Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2012
The first stanza is my favorite.
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:iconcf15:
CF15 Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Very nice. Paints a picture in my head
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GraciaTheirin Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2011
wow i love it
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Beyondbirthday99 Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
EPIC!
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NightmareFromHeaven Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2011
wow this is really good. nice job ;)
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emoslovehugs Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2011  Student General Artist
That's amazing. love the rhythm it has. it flows nicely,
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TheFirstLostGirl Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2011
I like it :D
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requiemverde Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
very nice
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Sepheroth-Crow Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2011  Student Artist
is this about anyone in particular?
if you dont want to tell me you dont have to
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DarknessZoroark Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2011
dood, it recalls to 1 of my dreams I had...
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NeptuniaSulphur Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Wonderful
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Kiwi-of-Doom Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2011
This is truly brilliant, and I don't say that about much poetry.
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kyuubi-master81 Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2011
I fell in love with this
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lunamoth-13 Featured By Owner May 22, 2011
You had me hooked on the first two lines. FAVES TIMES INFINITY! =D
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sasha-mangalover Featured By Owner May 13, 2011
awww... depressing. in a good way. a way that makes me go :aww sweet. no joke
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Emmiegirl Featured By Owner May 2, 2011
brilliant! fave! love your poem! wonderfully describing death in a new way! you are an amazing poet! :D
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TragiclyDying Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I love this. You're talented.
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ilove123candy456 Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2011
that is the most touching sad poem i have ever read it got to me thank you
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